"Yoake no Uta" Cover/Japan Disaster Song 4.11.11

[Jonny]

Oh I like it. And Ringo's wig too :-). I think it's a wig too...

[Lustau]

I like this song. The organ is too loud, but apart from that I like it. The song has a hymnlike feel up until 1:22 that makes the organ a nice touch. I love her singing on this as well. She needs to do this kind of earnest, belting-it-out singing more often.

[frecklegirl]

Oh yeah... I should/can translate this.

Romaji lyrics:

yoake no uta yo
watashi no kokoro no　kinou no kanashimi
nagashite okure
yoake no uta yo
watashi no kokoro ni　wakai chikara o
mitashite okure

yoake no uta yo
watashi no kokoro no　afureru omoi o
wakatte okure
yoake no uta yo
watashi no kokoro ni　ooki na nozomi o
dakasete okure

yoake no uta yo
watashi no kokoro no　chiisa na shiawase
mamotte okure
yoake no uta yo
watashi no kokoro ni　omoidasaseru
furusato no sora

Translation:

Oh dawn song
Wash away
my heart’s sadness of yesterday
Oh dawn song
Fill
my heart with young strength

Oh dawn song
Understand
my heart’s overflowing feelings
Oh dawn song
Inspire
my heart with a great wish

Oh dawn song
Protect
my heart’s small happiness
Oh dawn song
You’ll make my heart remember
my hometown sky

Please don't copy and repost, especially without credit.

[Scribble R]

I wouldn't dare.

[TurtleFu]

Are you going to post it on your website?

[Mr Sands]

lol, I just had a go a translating this myself: http://www.nipponthebus.com/?p=2600

It was my first attempt at translating anything and I found it quite difficult to get the constant mentions of hearts into nice sentences so I left them out a bit.

I do have a question too frecklegirl, why did you translate the last line as "You’ll make..." rather than "Let me..." or "Allow me..."?

Translating things is hard.....

[deadgrandma]

Translating a cover? Wouldn't there be a translation of the original somewhere? Are the lyrics different in the TJ version?

[Nimh]

Originally Posted by Mr Sands

I do have a question too frecklegirl, why did you translate the last line as "You’ll make..." rather than "Let me..." or "Allow me..."?

Translating things is hard.....

I think frecklegirl is right, in the literal sense. "Omoidasaseru" is the song's causative action upon "kokoro."

If I were translating the last two lines I'd make it a little softer, though. "You remind me of my hometown sky."

[Maou]

I agree with Nimh on the last lines. The softer line isn't as literal, but it helps convey the softer, hopeful feeling of the song.

[frecklegirl]

Eh, I stand by what I had. I know I'm more of a literal translator, I don't like overly figurative translations that are more about "the gist" than reflecting what is actually being said in words. I try to translate all verb tenses and most words the same, and that's how I translate causative tense.

Also, I translated this using lyrics I found on uta-net (Japanese lyrics site) from other pre-existing versions of the song, and I listened to the cover to make sure the lyrics were the same. So I can't say the spacing is correct with how Tokyo Jihen might have it but the words are.

Will I post this on my site... not for a while, not until it gets a legitimate release somewhere (I bet it will). If the next album/single (after Sora/Onna) comes out without it, then I will, but I'd prefer to wait until it's part of a release. That's why I put it here! For eeeveryone who's ever studied Japanese to nitpick...